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Extra Terrestrial


Mike

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wow!! ok so i put a RJD2 beat on my computer and its very good, pena keeps on telling me that i should use it, so im listening to him. the beat is "Ghost Writer" off of Deadringer. So i wrote lyrics to it, just so i could have a good flow, and its very good. I have more than half done (beat and lyrics) i just have to record my voice to it which ive been practicing but i wanna get it perfect. so dinner is soon so im gonna stop practcing so my voice has a rest. then ill record and try to put it up tonight!! it will be on my mysapce too, but im putting it on here first cause thats how i do :mrt2:

heres the lyrics so you can see, until its all done

Extra Terrestrial

Written by Mike

We dream about the sun, moon, space and the stars

and wonder if alien dreams are similar to ours

To escape out world, to finally get away

Dreams about the sun at night and the moon during the day

how could they live similar lives like we live?

Could they pollute and offer drugs like the drugs we give?

Intellegent thoughtflow, express though the arts

They know the anatomy so they pick out the parts

Take the Lungs, stomach, liver, and some of the veins

Leave the rest for us cause we wasted our brains

Squashed the heart, it wasnt pumping sh!t

And Definatly not going into anything that we spit

They're taking over man, there's nothing we can do

Can you lend me a gun, so i can take out one or two?

I wanna save my soul, and the body, the carrier

Dont submit to the enemy, help me build the barrier

Pull me by my wrist on the ship, im aboard

See the things they took, a pen, a mic, and a sword

Pen:lyrics and bills. sword: thrills and kills

And the mic: speech, power and, dreams fufilled

But nothing they can take to represent the love

Only images of hate, a push and a shove

And i wonder to myself, what kinda view

The rest of their planet will have of me and you

I mean the people with heart, people with soul

Opposed to the ones who have to have control

I explained our race, and the diffence of people

Explained love, religion, Jesus and the steaple

It looked back with almost all understanding

thats when i shouted and started demanding

"You can't fvck sh!t up the same that we did!

We didnt take the love, took what you had to get rid

See we got caught up in power like you

Too late before we realized we knew

Any world war is really a civil war

So why the hell should you fight yourself for?"

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EDIT:should i change the name to close encounter, or maybe like outer intelligence..something like that

Edited by WILL IS ILL
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Interesting concept, if I understand it right... but I don't think you really conveyed it as well as you could have. The connection between the aliens and ourselves seemed too obvious to be an in your "ah ha!" type thing and too sublte to be a blatent story. But that's just my take, I could be completely misunderstanding your intentions. :)

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It was really good! :2thumbs: but this part

See we got caught up in power like you

Too late before we realized we knew

Any world war is really a civil war

So why the hell should you fight yourself for?"

u wasnt followin too much the beat, but most of the audio is good! nice work man!

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a little off on the flow in the very beginning, id add more emotion, not a lot cause the song doesn't require it but it would be better if you would come off a little harder in the first verse.

like a little bit too early in saying 'im aboard' in the 2nd verse, but thats just my opinion.

add a couple syllables to

'See we got caught up in power like you

Too late before we realized we knew'

cause you had to pause on the second line and it cut off your flow.

its a nice song throughout, keep it up! :2thumbs:

oh btw nice concept once again

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