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Entrapment (Parts I&II)


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i've been digging thru my old stuff trying to get inspired, and i came across this two part poem of mine that I really loved, seems strange cuz it's hard for me to pick a fave of something i wrote, but this is "the truth" for me lol anyway here goes:

ENTRAPMENT (Part I, Free Me)

Free me...from my current state of mind because it's making me crazy

Free me...from female intuition because my soul feels hazy

Free me...from past oppressions and temptations that say,"come hither"

Free me...from the stress of life, for my heart has began to wither

Free me...from the secrets that hold me forever captive in their grasp

Free me...from the pains of my future and the joys of my past

Free me...from things i don't know, for I hear ignorance is bliss

Free me...as if i were of value, something you would surely miss

Free me...from your judgement, your criticisms, and critiques

Free me...from my hidden talents for my mind is too unique

Free me...from jealousy and hatred, for there's nothing in me you should fear

Free me...from what you think you know, for there's more to what you hear

Free me...from the cold stares I receive when I come to a crossroads

Free me...from remembering every great lesson i've ever been told

Free me...from the storm within, that even the wildest flames couldn't smolder

Free me...from imprisonment of this body when my mind is so much older

Free me...from first impressions, and what you look at when you see me

Free me...from what it is you see when you look at me

Free me...from stereotypes and assumptions that hold back people of my kind

FREEDOM hold me tighter in my current state of mind......

ENTRAPMENT (Part II, I'm Free Now)

I'm free now...from that state of mind that had me second-guessing

I'm free now...from intuition of a gender that had me digressing

I'm free now...from old opressions and temptations that kept on calling

I'm free now...from life's stresses, and my heart rate is no longer falling

I'm free now...from secrets that vowed to grip me for as long as i live

I'm free now...from joys and pains in my past and future like nectar in my sieve

I'm free now...from ignorant bliss-I hold knowledge of great weight

I'm free now...because you let go, then reached again when it was too late

I'm free now...from critiques,criticisms, and judgements of any kind

I'm free now...from my hidden talents, that are too unique and far gone to find

I'm free now...from your hatred, jealousy, and everything else you were intimidated by

I'm free now...from what you think you heard, when you thought the truth was a lie

I'm free now...from entwined crossroads and the cold stares of strangers

I'm free now...from remembering great lessons and being wary of safe dangers

I'm free now...from the wild climate of an erratic storm within

I'm free now...from the immaturity of my age as the expansion of my mind begins

I'm free now...from first impressions and what you thought of when you first saw me

I'm free now...from the dirty looks and opinions that block what you can truly see

I'm free now...from stereotypes, assumptions, and petty little mind games

EMANCIPATED...through my heart and soul, and i guarantee I'll never be the same

-ash

i apologize for the repetition, even my teacher at the time said it was killing the imagery, but it just doesn't flow the same to me when i change it, i'd be glad to know what you think though, maybe i'll post more of my old stuff

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Unbelieveable. May I copy this as a poem to read every time I look in my 'binder of poems'? I loved the deep thought each line puts the reader in. This would be a nice rap or even spoken word audio form even. You seriously should get your poems published in a book or in poetry contests or soemthing.

How old were you and how long ago did you write that?

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Umm, wow thnx for all the great feedback guys I really appreciate it I didn't expect to get too much of a response b/c these pieces are about two years old. I wrote them during my senior year in HS, and I think they were actually a couple mths. apart, originally it was just the first poem that took about 15-20 mins, to write....they were compiled with some others i wrote for a project, I may post one or two others

FuQ, trust me I'm working on it lol copyrights,publishing and all. I actually have performed these pieces and gotten great response, so that def. inspired me to write more.That's my dream to be a writer(more than I feel I am, you know?) so hopefully things will work out for me sooner or later..I'd be honored to be in your "binder of poems" you know I love ya lol

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