Mike

IM ONLY MAKING ANOTHER POST SO IT SHOWS UP ON THE MAIN PAGE someone help my put it up, it wont work when itry to make an attachment, if yo uwanna hear it then help!!!

here it is BUT BEFORE YOU OPEN IT, ID LIKE TO SAY A COUPLE THINGS this is my frist recording ever, and its also my first beat that i made ever. i personally dont think the beats good, at least for a hip hop song. i think it would be a good gorillaz song or something. and there are a couple things wrong with the recording like my microphone moving, so youll hear that. but please give me ALL the feedback you possibly can. oh and i screw up the hat line and say it backwards hahaha...but try to enjoy :paperbag: parental advisrey EDIT: it didnt go on!!! its not working i need help

i havent recorded yet, well im recording poser now. acutally im working on the beat and trying to make it sound perfect. truthfully its cause i feel i that you guys expect alot from me. so i want it perfect. when im done poser ill mes aorund with a beat and see which it fits too. i think im gonna do blind.

i said i was rerecording it so hold your damn horses hahaha

on the n word....i showed my black friends and they didnt care. they said that i crossed the line, but to prove a point. and as long as i didnt use it to try to be black or to insult blacks they didnt care. so i feel that you guys have the same feelign on it.

im making the beat a little slower than it was which makes the beat less annoying, so i have to rerecord. sorry.

Heres the tracklist to my album, ive shared all the lyrics with you. Neutral Ground 1-Introduction 2-Not Yet Famous 3-Poser 4-Some Words 5-White Lie 6-Amnesia 7-Blind 8-On Unmarked Territory 9-Writers Block Its a short tracklist but thats what im putting on, theres another track i wanted on but it featured my friend and a) he moved b) i want my album to be all me My friend gave me the idea that Nas had his whole first album with nobody feaured on it, so thats kinda my plan too. To make it off my steam.

havent recorded this cause i dont think i will, cause it would be really hard to rap cause the other people talk and stuff and theres a narrarator. theres just too many different parts... maybe i should do it like ' trapped in a closet' and do like 30 differnt songs lololol

i made another cd with all old school excpet one track....wave em off ok this is offtopic but i feel that i dont need to make a new thread cause it wouldnt be worth it but, does anybody feel that who stole the dj and and then she bit me extremely similar...maybe you all know something i dont like who stole the dj is the sequal track or something. just a thought back on track. i cant tell you if he liked it or not cause i gave the new cd to him today. track list is from what i have so i dont have all his old school stuff (no rock the house or hes the dj) Wave Em Off The Reverend Somethin' Like Dis Jeff Waz On The Beat Box Just One Of Those Days Pump Up The Bass Can't Wait To Be With You The Things That U Do I Wanna Rock Ring My Bell He's The D.J., I'm The Rapper Parents Just Don't Understand I'm All That Too Damn Hype Girls Ain't Nothing But Trouble i did the mix very quickly and didnt put the same though into it as the first one, but i added something like this, jeff waz on the beat box.. i feel we forgot ring my bell! so i added that. i realize now that i put hes the dj on both mixes whoops

will smith- tell me why

IF YOU REALLY WANNA READ ALL THIS I RECOMMEND IT. Its 5 pages printed. not a rap but i was thinking of recording it as one if i have time. the only thing is its 3 different poems, i just refer to it as one. the second one is kinda hard to follow cause only one character out of 5 has a name. so its like "the man" "the women" and on top of that the point of view changes alot..every stanza The City Tragedy By Mike Petrow Shes sweating but you can still tell in the rain Shes crying but you can still see the tears in the rain Shes hurts so much like she slipped and fell in the rain She tries to cover it up but you can still see shes got pain She thinks everyone else in the world will be the same She thinks of home and wishes she just stayed She wishes for the better so right just then she prayed Hes so glad he got away with what hes done She never wouldve done it if he hadnt bought that gun It was a random girl so he did it just for fun He felt guilty when she cried about her son But he couldnt resist that body it was blinding like the sun When he finished up he told her to never tell He looked her in the eye and then he ran like hell He paused; I cant trust this girl so I might just as well "I cant believe the sick people in this worl There lies a body on the floor, cold and curled Its in a little ball she tried to help the pain All I see in the city is like theres no one that is sane I line the girl with chalk, here comes the body bag Shes naked on the pavement whats left of clothes are rags I cant stand to see her eyes so I cover up her face I wonder if Ill remember her, or will she be gone without a trace Shes another person dead, this time another girl I was just on this block, what a small world I was taking a ride in my squad car Five minutes from here, it wasnt very far I shouldnt wear my badge, to the ground I let it fall This never would have happened if I answered that call" Another City Tragedy By Mike Petrow The little girl walked into town by herself She walked into a store; pretty things sit on the shelf The reason shes here isnt to buy some toys She puts back the item and hears a familiar noise Down the street a man speed walks down the block He needs to let out his nerves so he picks up a little rock He holds it in his hand and rubs it with his thumbs His friend will be here soon he doesnt wanna look dumb He hasnt seen him for six or seven years Mark got arrested after he had too many beers He met this girl, "I dont like this story I mean he was drunk but its too graphic for me" He thought of Mark and stopped at the corner The old lady hasnt seen her granddaughter since her birthday "What will we talk about I don't know what to say Oh there she is looking at that doll" The old lady didnt recognize her, she had gotten so tall She called over the girl, the girl paused her head "Maybe she didnt hear what I said" The lady called her again the little girl turned her head The girl was embarrassed she didnt turn before, her face turned all red The girl called out grandma and gave a loving hug Love is expressed better when the hug is snug Down the other way a man walks with a bag Two masks, a gun, and an old bloody rag The rag was old, from the past, another time Once it was white, now its faded red Thats a story in its own but its already been said Up the road he sees a figure, fiddling with a stone Mark knows its his friend, but he stays alone He thinks of the past, he knows the consequences Here it would be different; he wont jump as many fences. You cant convince Mark, he makes everybody pay Once he gets money theres nothing you can say. The man sees mark, he waves to his friend He plays it tuff, but inside he wants it to end This isnt what he does, hes got a job He doesnt hurt anyone, never did he rob "I hope I dont chicken out, I really need this money" Hes paying off his debt, he lost the bet, and he had to run he, he had to The thugs were gonna kill him. From that point on, only fear fulfills him Mark is almost here, only time to back out But he wants to make a good impression; Mark can tell hes full of doubt Mark said hes gonna rob one more Its the late shift, only one person in the store "I handed him the mask, then I gave him the gun I can tell he wants to leave, drop the sh*t and run" The other man was worried, they looked suspicious But mark said it would be good for him, almost nutritious. "I see two grownup boys, they must be cold Theyre wearing dark ski masks; one has a necklace made of gold I think its pretty, they cant be so bad The one of the left is tall, just like my dad Hey, one has a black piece of metal, the other guy too Theyre coming this way, I wonder what their gonna do" "Oh man here we go, were almost at the door Its about a yard away, maybe a little more Mark just opened the door, my heart is pounding Marks shot two times, just to get attention, Marks gun is shaking in my hand; I dont know what to do" The mans hand is breathing heavy, he cant pursue "Oh dear, not again, the store is getting robbed Why do I have this store, I should quit my job Basic procedure, just give them what they want Do it fast, no attitude, never taunt I dont want my granddaughter to get hurt One goes 'empty the register' barrel aimed at my shirt" "Come on, come on, this is taking too long Whats he doing? Hes doing it all wrong He calls me over 'Mark im not too sure' He talks to the little girl, I think he likes her" "This man is nice to me, the other one scares me But nothing in the world could prepare me For the shock of my life" "Ever since that day I always pick up my radio The girl in the alley, oh here we go Tearing up again, so many dead faces In the stores and alleys, so many dirty places The little girls body, with her hand over her eyes Still a moist tear on her cheek, from when she cried The old women dead behind the counter I cant stand this job, so much terror The stakes are way too high when I make an error" The Final City Tragedy By Mike Petrow "I cant live with this guilt, so many lives I let fall Just cause im not fast enough, not fast at all Im still in my uniform, fresh from the station The criminal got away, I should get probation Knowing that hes out there, the other confessed Looks like he couldnt deal with the weight on his chest" "Couldnt get away in two stolen cars Mark got away and now im behind bars No way out, theres no where to hide Im here for life cause of double homicide I didnt pull the trigger though, that was mark The police thought it was me, couldnt see in the dark Unfortunately were all innocent at least thats what we say People that didnt do it still have to pay I wish for the better so right now Ill pray" "I know he didn’ do it, theres nothing I can do Hes still on death row even though what he says is true" "Ill have no final meal, im feeding on my sorrow Knowing my life will end the day after tomorrow" "He died peacefully, in the chair he fried First time in years, I broke down and cried I should be in that chair, but im not that tuff The virgin gun on my hip should do good enough"

this is definatly the most poetic rhyme i have ever written. its full of symbolism, metaphor, personification. but its still a rap. it has no hook cause i would plan to spit slowly and have an epic beat. Feedback palease On Unmarked Territory Written by Concept On unmarked territory, no one stands No mans land, boundaries unplanned The spot that’s left over, nobody goes People see it, about it, nobody knows No one has a problem with it but nobody cares Stick to their regulars and nobody goes there The cold spot that’s always told not To be with, it’s judged everyday Annoying cause it always seems to get in your way A man with no name walks an empty path Furious with others and lets out his wrath Write lyrics to songs inside of his head Hates his loneliness, wishes he was dead Rejected from his friends cause they don’t like him If his rhymes solved problems he’d keep on writin He sat on the curb and put his head between his knees Prays it gets better, “God help me please” He picks up his head, but has no where to go Where to start to start off, he don’t even know The land stays there, lets the wind blow around It enjoys how know one steps on its ground The man with no name continues his journey Nowhere to go but he’s in no hurry Remembers Mr. Frost and takes the road less traveled Noticed the perfection of the untouched gravel He continues his path, signs disappear Wonders if anyone has ever been here Writes with a stone and he makes a map he Settles down and the land is happy

alright so i recorded this song. but im hesistant to share it becuase i know that the beat and my rapping are both wack as hell. if you really wanna hear it ill do it, but i warn you in advance its not my best

yeah thats how i feel. but its alright

some of this stuff i feel isnt really needed, but its better than the old forum so i guess its not bad

:lolsign: i never picture him as an adult rapper. more like a kid that grew up.

NEW LYRICS, thats right i got soem new lyrics. so the flow on this one i kinda picture like a mix of biggy and the song "respiration" by black star. i picture my chorus like what they say in respiration 'so my much on my mind i just cant recline' so thats that Amnesia Written by Concept Over my amnesia Now I remember my trouble Shaved it all off but re-grown the stubble Panic attacks, anxiety levels high Stress piled up, could break down and cry Never fully heal, that's my prediction Live the rest of my life, with an altoid addiction Chorus Memories return, my thoughts are clearin Mistakes I made, voices im hearin Im thankful, but hate that im healed Troubles everyday, and I write to get away Inspiration from the craziest places Stare at a white wall and spit about races Different places, what's wrong in the world Relationships fade unlike the face of a pearl Listen to my voice, take my picture Think of the times I spent wit cha I know some girls don't like public affection How do you think he feels when he gets public rejection Take it in that direction, loves a blessin If I trip let me fall, I need to learn a lesson Overtired, would go on if I could Hard floor never felt so good Outta my amnesia Chorus Say my name you can never wear it out Concept know you know what im about I’ve watched my steps everyday since birth Pray for forgiveness like my last day on earth But now I know my rights and my wrongs Dream one day, someone knows the words to my songs Chorus I spit what I think, not urban story Write my own sh!t, no ghost writer for me Im a writer not a fighter But killer when I spit Roll alone like a misfit Start sh!t, never quit Concept, don’t forget (whisper) like I did

heres my 'studio'

for the record i have gotten a beat for this song so ill be recording it soon, it fits really well but sounds kinda amatuerish(well im an amatuer beat maker) so im gonna try to make it sound a lil better before i record. and on top if that i need to trim down some of the lines so it fits with the beat better. im excited so you should be too.

lolololol i feel sssooooo stupid right now

On account of me rewritng most of my songs, heres the new 'poser' i took out a line and combined 2 verses. and added some to the last verse. FEEDBACK please "Poser" Written by Concept I listen to rap so call me a wigger But a poser goes far like playin with the trigger Just to look cool when really its not You live in the suburbs too? yeah, thats what i thought (Chrous) x2 You wanna be me but i want you to be you Your a poser Your just a damn poser Just a damn poser All these middle school kids think their bad asses So they act all tough and skip some of their classes Wearin fitteds and chains oversized for their bodies 6th grade girls wearin thongs, oo what a hottie I mean seriously you girls just learned your ABC's I tell you kids to watch what they do and they looks at me, Like im crazy, on crack or LSD Like im too drugged to see, that their all grown up now The way you live your life has got me askin "how?” Your name's J-Easy, hi , my names mike You buy a fitted hat of the team you don’t even like Poser wears a hat of the teams that’s supreme I wear my hat cause its my favorite team Don’t it seem That we don’t do sh!t for ourselves anymore? We do it to show off, and that’s for sure Producin more posers and I know that’s its helpless Now you retrospectin and you know who dealt this Chorus (x2) I cant help if you wanna look poor and i wanna look betta I cant help that you beg for change when i make the chedda I stay true to who I am Define me in between Em and Bam Im not exclusive to rap but i dig it the most You copped a benz, ****ed a hoe, is that what you boast Raps going through hard times So I’ll stay true with my rhymes Im in high school and I plan to get a degree Struggling though but still look at me I got more potential than the eyes can see You'll realize that when im at the university I do this cause I love it, I know you want exposure The girl you brag about, I doubt she even knows ya Suppose ya, don’t make it to the game Your life wont be the same, you’ll have a regular name With a regular job, and a regular life Sit down to dinner with your regular wife Can you handle that? Or will you still try to rhyme Or feed the urge to rap every time You flip on BET, or watch ‘8 mile’ It helped me get goin too, but it took a while Chorus (x4)

i liked kanyes beat, i agree with how he likes to use stuff that hasnt been heard. even though i havent really made my beats yet, i want to make all of them original, even when people suggest i just rap over someone elses beat. pharrells link isnt working for me yet, but i want to see it. have them two worked on a song together ever?

im so confused lol. but i dont really play games at all, i used to try to beat records but now the high scores are insane. so i gave up. i dont get what all these cd things are in the bank, is it something you can listen to on jjfp radio on the site?

i can wait

awesome song, i love writing love rhymes so this one i can relate to :2thumbs: