Luigie Posted September 3, 2005 Report Share Posted September 3, 2005 here's a rhyme i did yesterday at school, i was gettin sleeppy, and the inspiration came to my mind. I dont know to rhyme in english very good the idea was in spanish, but i adapted it, of course u'll find some BIG errors, plz correct me. Yo! Check this damn song which i composed wit love I’m gonna take the microphone and sing like old times at home All day I walk the streets, watchin ppl takin sh*t Drugs everywhere, nobody cares bout the beat. I’m a boy just like you, but I don’t act like a fool I walk wit my friends and you got your goddamn crew You think you got style, but your manners are whack That really sucks, I think you deserve a big slap. Instead of stealin money 4 ur crap called weed Or maybe kickin asses after drinkin beer Start to learn good manners my lil’ kid It’s good 4 u believe me instead of sayin sh*t. Now u know wat to do, u aint lost Transform ur heart and start the “defrost” Let all the ppl see that u got really good props Forget bout practicing those karate chops. To everybody who read this simple song I think u learned how not to act like a king kong Start doin and telling everybody wat I said And you’ll see that u wont need first-aid Now very happy and educated go to ur home Do the right things and give a kiss to ur mom. (Big Luigie) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kbfprince Posted September 3, 2005 Report Share Posted September 3, 2005 Well nice rhyme. Most of the lines don't rhyme tho for example, at the end 'Start doin and telling everybody wat I said And you’ll see that u wont need first-aid Now very happy and educated go to ur home Do the right things and give a kiss to ur mom.' said doesn't rhyme wit aid unless its pronounced "sade" and home doesn't rhyme wit mom. First 6 lines of the first and the first 4 of the 2nd verse don't rhyme also. But if it was adapted from Spanish just try and make it rhyme somehow change the words. Nice start! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luigie Posted September 3, 2005 Author Report Share Posted September 3, 2005 thanks man! i'll keep it in my mind...I need to add some words to my vocabulary, i dont practice english very much cause here in my country my ppl say i'm mad wit hip-hop, they say that's crap, well they dont know :lolsign: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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