analogue Posted February 26, 2007 Report Share Posted February 26, 2007 (edited) I'm gonna tell the truth in studio booth about how this whole country is obsessed with loot People gettin controlled by the system No freedom of speech cause they take it like you dissin em You need to follow the rules or else you will be Lazy and if you don't they take it like you crazy Cause taking risks is somethin that you just gotta do and pray that the Goverment won't sue Cause they treat you like a robot and if you fight back they'll take it as a pout but you need to keep ya head up high and stay stong and if things start gettin out of hand for so long all you gotta do is Chorus: Fight back Take a stand Let your voice be heard Fight back Take a stand Let your voice be heard Now i normally wouldn't like to do this but i think i'm gonna have to diss the way the system is being run cause at the end of the day they suck out all the fun It's the truth cause it's all about the loot The system starts a war at the drop of an hat and they don't care about the kids who smoke crack I just like to speek my mind but know that they won't let me do that all the time but i need to stay focused cause if i don't i'll get killed by plauge of locust and all i need to do is Chorus: Fight back Take a stand Let your voice be heard Fight back Take a stand Let your voice be heard Edited February 26, 2007 by analogue Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mfuqua23 Posted February 26, 2007 Report Share Posted February 26, 2007 "People gettin controlled by the system No freedom of speech cause they take it like you dissin em" - I like how you put that form of truth. You need to follow the rules or else you will be tardy if you do this then life will never come handy - The flow of the idea isn't together. You associate 'tardy' with 'lateness'. That should be somewhere relevant in that line, because that's obviously the rule your talking about breaking. Or point out some other effect that comes from not following the rules. "but you need to keep ya head up high and stay stong and if things start gettin out of hand for so long" - This can should really cool with a nice rhythm in how you say it. As you write more and more, you should be sharper with your thought process and putting it together. The topic is of great value, but the rhymes are too short to express a full idea. All that matters at the end of the day, is that you got to thinking. That's good for your mind. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
analogue Posted February 26, 2007 Author Report Share Posted February 26, 2007 Cool Thanks for the review Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
J-o-e Posted February 26, 2007 Report Share Posted February 26, 2007 The same things as FuQ said really, I liked how simple this rhyme scheme was but there was alot of truth init, it just proves you don't have to be the smartest or quickest, u can simply say the truth thats why I like it anyway...Good Job and keep it up!! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
analogue Posted February 26, 2007 Author Report Share Posted February 26, 2007 I changed the lyrics around a little bit Not much just a small tweek. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luigie Posted February 27, 2007 Report Share Posted February 27, 2007 the first verse was my fav Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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