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On Umarked Territory


Mike

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this is definatly the most poetic rhyme i have ever written. its full of symbolism, metaphor, personification. but its still a rap. it has no hook cause i would plan to spit slowly and have an epic beat. Feedback palease

On Unmarked Territory

Written by Concept

On unmarked territory, no one stands

No mans land, boundaries unplanned

The spot that’s left over, nobody goes

People see it, about it, nobody knows

No one has a problem with it but nobody cares

Stick to their regulars and nobody goes there

The cold spot that’s always told not

To be with, it’s judged everyday

Annoying cause it always seems to get in your way

A man with no name walks an empty path

Furious with others and lets out his wrath

Write lyrics to songs inside of his head

Hates his loneliness, wishes he was dead

Rejected from his friends cause they don’t like him

If his rhymes solved problems he’d keep on writin

He sat on the curb and put his head between his knees

Prays it gets better, “God help me please”

He picks up his head, but has no where to go

Where to start to start off, he don’t even know

The land stays there, lets the wind blow around

It enjoys how know one steps on its ground

The man with no name continues his journey

Nowhere to go but he’s in no hurry

Remembers Mr. Frost and takes the road less traveled

Noticed the perfection of the untouched gravel

He continues his path, signs disappear

Wonders if anyone has ever been here

Writes with a stone and he makes a map he

Settles down and the land is happy

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theres this poerty contest for teens in a magazine called parade that comes with our newspaper. it has to be 20 lines and the winner gets $300. so im entering this poem. the only provblem is that its more than 20 lines so im cutting it down.

here it is, i tried to keep what i thought were the most important lines and still have the same meaning in it. cause each line had a deeper meaning. tell me what you think.

On unmarked territory, no one stands

No mans land, boundaries unplanned

No one has a problem with it but nobody cares

The cold spot that’s always told not

To be with, it’s judged everyday

Annoying cause it always seems to get in your way

A man with no name walks an empty path

Furious with others and lets out his wrath

Rejected from his friends cause they don’t like him

He sat on the curb and put his head between his knees

Prays it gets better, “God help me please”

He picks up his head, but has no where to go

Where to start to start off, he doesn’t even know

The land stays there, lets the wind blow around

It enjoys how know one steps on its ground

The man with no name continues his journey

Remembers Frost and takes the road less traveled

Noticed the perfection of the untouched gravel

Writes with a stone and he makes a map he

Settles down and the land is happy

this could be my big break!! its in the paper if i win! so i could get somewhere. thats my highest hope.

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