[unofficial battle I]

Ok, i'll start it of,

Now why are you guys doubling up on me

Your rhymes have been composed brashly

You should have composed your rhymes more acutely,

Now like ya grandma they kind of wrinkly,

You went out of your way to diss me,

Becoming like my girl all bitchy,

Is this the best you can spit,

thats it?,

Now try to absorb my suggestion,

take it in, dont question,

your gonna be pitied,

the only way you'll beat me is oif your on mo weed,

your getting psychotic,

your rhymes chaotic,

there unbalanced, rambling,

and to me they don’t meen a damm thing

im gonna lick you in ever confrontation,

show you whose sovereign,

get you to hire a spokesmen,

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do you guys wanna go at it again?

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Good Battle.....whos sucked? dont wana start another one do we? haha....

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my last one was pretty bad you have to admit,

another one? piss off, you've embarrassed me enough,

your rhymes i think are the best ive seen at this site joe,(so far at least), and brace your also pretty good,

im going to have a brake, retire from this thing for like the next 15 years...

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joe, braces up,

you guys whopped my ass, well done

man that last one sucked,

keep it it up, your rhymes are really thoughtful

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my response(man this sucks!)

Like a tornado in the Midwest,

You’ll be screaming and a thumping will be herd in ya chest,

Your kinda sick, like ali in eighty one,

Your times up, its done,

Retire when the times right,

Preserve your rep, don’t try to fight,

Don’t be like Jordan playing till his 42,

Wrecking his rep just cause he wanted to outdo that kobe dude,

I’ll knock you out in less than 3 rounds,

That’s my prediction, how does it sound,

Maybe then you can be like will, was lost but now is found,

You think you’re a babe ruth,

Please swear on a bible that ain’t holy truth,

You think you’re the man,

Haha, about as credible as the evidence for iraq by uncle sam

As lost as Georgie boy when giving his inauguration address,

Or I guy that got borderline idiot on his 1q test,

As annoying as DrPhil mcgraw,

Make your eyes sore,

Please please if we were playing bball to use an analogy,

You’d be my 6th pick on the bench, just come on to make u feel better, that’s reality,

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Hey Joe, sorry I came across as an arrogant prick,

It’s true, you almost had me licked,

But, hang on, let me explain a little about me,

Lets see if I got any real talent /credibility

This is my third rhyme till now

Every rhyme I’m gaining ground

And Your like you wanna show me the light,

Lol, the criteria for that would be you’d gotta be bright,

Nah, I’m just kidding I like ya flow,

Your skillz show,

But are you a rime spilla,

Or just some rap side show filler

,

you sure u got enough to set fire to a mic,

like run dmc rock till dawn’s in sight

You ain’t no vanilla, I know that,

But you ain’t no ghost faced killa cat,

Keep it up, maybe someday you’ll be well known,

Your face on ever clip mtv shows

You be the guy all the honey’s wanna be with,

The one the guys wanna be seen with,

The one with the million dollar car for show,

The one all the haters suddenly wanna know

And braces up, you kill me,

You wanna take me to rap court,

That’s all you can spit forth,

Now just imagine if some record label actually took you on,

Sooner or later they’d know they were hit by a loud mouth con ,

If they ever did, if they tried, if they lied and said your fly,

man, i'd know why Will made tell me why

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My reply to joe and Braces up:

Please please joe and braces up,

just cause I’m a first timer dont mean i cant light it up,

im a rookie at the game,

but that dont mean I’m the same,

my rhymes have meaning,

do your rhymes get a crowd feeling,

you say im a passerby,

just another fake rapper living a lie,

but can a fake drop rhymes as quick as this,

make ya never miss,

every word, every line, every diss,

and make ya like who was this,

im sick of all the wannabes,

I wanna restore rap to what it used to be,

These are my first ever rhymes,

Ill get finer with time,

But for the moment, the present,

the benchmark, i think ive set it

P.s: i woulden't call this a freestyle case i went over it and fixed it up a bit,

and hero1 you live in Greensborough?, i lived there pretty much all my life till i was 14,

cheers

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,

Anyway, my names rawad and im from melbourne australia, im a huge dj jazzy jeff/will smith fan.

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dude where in melbourne are you from.. I'm the creator of this site and live in melbourne..

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hey, i live in clayton, i go to uni there..

what about you?

[unofficial battle I]

Let's just begin with the obvious, Rawad,

Posting rhymes twice can't get you an award,

Disillusioned with fact that you're in the big time,

Just another passer by without any creative rhyme,

Listening to the Game is the reason why I am sane,

You can never beat Em 'cause you're walking down the wrong lane,

The future of yours will turn out just like any other,

A broken marriage without your child or its filthy mother,

No hope of a record contract is destined to be your harsh reality,

Keep whining all your life, cause Will ain't gonna show you pity.

Commercialism is much needed, you may hate it or like,

Fifty saves the rap game now, so you better take a hike,

Spare us with this nonsense about sleeping with a hooker,

I ain't gonna pay a ho 'cause my soulmate is my lover,

Resistance to temptations always keeps me going,

Let's see you make me reap 'cause I know what I'm sowing,

Just a first time poster yet you started dissing every member,

You just might slip with your ego trip, you better remember,

Make peace with you inner self and come out of this illusion,

It's about time someone realised and sent you to an institution.

Byes. :grin:

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You guys absolutely killed me , your pretty good ,

sorry i dident introduce myself( i dident know this forum was that accessed, most forums you dont hear from people in ages).

Anyway, my names rawad and im from melbourne australia, im a huge dj jazzy jeff/will smith fan. Anyway, the reason i posted was that i really admire people who can freestyle, and I just wanted to see if i could do it, usually I suck at rhyming, (maybe it showed), i think you guys who can do it are pretty mad.

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some more freestyle:

u all tryin to out rap each other,

go runnin home to ya mothers,

how long did it take you to rhyme,

man how did ya pass the time,

can nobody rap as quick as this,

eloquent, intelligent, never a miss,

will smith'd approve,

man did your rap ever make people move,

get them down,

and with a pumping bass,

nobody even cares about Nas,

cause the joints got a spark,

im about to make me mark,

the rap world aint ever gonna be the same ,

when once and 4 all I get rid of Em and the game,

just get ready, cause my ****'s about to blow,

duck, or i'll make you reep what i sow,

the commercial crap is dead,

and thank God the mak's returning cred,

back to the old school days,

when rap was not about what ya'd get paid,

how much you'd get laid

y'all lyin you probanly need to pay to get laid,

cause fifty, your as ugly as God's ever made,

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some more freestyle:

u all tryin to out rap each other,

go runnin home to ya mothers,

how long did it take you to rhyme,

man how did ya pass the time,

can nobody rap as quick as this,

eloquent, intelligent, never a miss,

will smith'd approve,

man did your rap ever make people move,

get them down,

and with a pumping bass,

nobody even cares about Nas,

cause the joints got a spark,

im about to make me mark,

the rap world aint ever gonna be the same ,

when once and 4 all I get rid of Em and the game,

just get ready, cause my ****'s about to blow,

duck, or i'll make you reep what i sow,

the commercial crap is dead,

and thank God the mak's returning cred,

back to the old school days,

when rap was not about what ya'd get paid,

how much you'd get laid

y'all lyin you probanly need to pay to get laid,

cause fifty, your as ugly as God's ever made,

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now isten to this rhyme i bring,

all you that are just in it for the bling,

you all need to envisage,

it takes more to rap then a silly image,

will smith know's what i mean,

and even pac dident just wanna be seen,

they had meaning in every verse,

wanna make you immerse,

can 50 do that, emnem, the Game?

man if u listen to them no way your gunna stay sane,

now listen, get this down,

thebest rap is never just bout a sound

inever just image, never about howmuch you can curse,

never about how much your worth, .....

bla, bla, ...this was jsut a quick freestyle of mine( this was the first time ;)

cheers,im a new member,

great freestyles u guys have,

Rawad